Coconut
Designed by Conrad Zimney
Layouts
Critique #1: Andrew Joung
Andrew liked both of my versions quite a bit, and specifically my use of colors in both. He had to decide that he liked my first version more because it was so much more organized than my the second version. He suggested that I could even switch the top left section with the middle section to create better visual hierarchy. He also suggested that I add titles to each one and make them more representative of my visual language model. Also add an overall title for the whole display.
Model emulation feedback
Andrew thought that I emulated my color and layout models very well. He suggested that I try emulating my color model even more by making the triangles non-transparent and making the text white.
Revisions based on this critique
Andrew's critiques unfortunately fell more in line with my original (first version) display, so not all of them applied to my second version that I decide to work with. His critique did prompt me to add titles for each display though, and an overall title for the entire infographic.
First Iteration
Second Iteration
Critique #2: Memie Huang
Memie liked my second version more because of the visual hierarchy created from the different sizes of the displays. She also thought that the information flowed way more smoothly and naturally in this display. There is less white space overall in this display which looks better also.
Model emulation feedback
Memie thought that I emulated my color and typogrpahy and layout models very well. She suggested that I draw from my visual language model more for the titles and add an overall title as well.
Revisions based on this critique
Memie's critique prompted me to make better use of each section that I created in my second display. I extended the colored aspects of my displays to take up less white space in the infographic and exploit the different visual potentials of each display more. I also drew from my visual language model more for labels in each of my displays.
Critique #3: Hai Nguyen
Hai liked my display overall, he thought that my color pallette was very good. He also enjoyed my use of visual language very much, and thought that my typography model also worked in well. His main suggestion was to play around with some of the sizing in order to better emulate my layout model.
Model emulation feedback
Hai thought that I emulated my color model the best, but that I needed to work on emulating my layout model more. As Marilyn suggested as well, it is as though I am actually emulating my first layout model more than the second one. It might be better to attempt to emulate the Superhero infographic's layout because mine is closer to that already.
Revisions based on this critique
Hai's critique would require significant resizing and proportion changing to implement. I decided to stick with my current layout since it draws from both layout models effectively.
Critique #2: Andrew Joung
Andrew thought that this iteration was very good. he didn't have ton of significant feedback besides to change the main title to be more creative and different from the others. He also suggested that I change the lower left title to be more similar to the other titles to create more unity.
Model emulation feedback
Andrew thought that I emulated my color model very well, as well as my visual language model. He thought that the labels and titles were very symbolic of my typography and visual language models.
Revisions based on this critique
Andrew's critique prompted me to change my main title to be less similar to my other sub-titles, as well as change my bottom left title to be more similar to the other sub-titles. This drew more attention to my main title while keeping the consistency of the sub-titles apparent
Critique #1: Kimiko Farmer
Kimiko had one major suggestion for me which was to add a textured background to my display. This would emulate my visual language model, however would go against my color model. She also thought that the text was too small in certain sections.
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Model emulation feedback
Overall she thought that I emulated my visual language model very well and that the color palette works very well. She also thought that I emulated my typography model well.
Revisions based on this critique
Kimiko's critique prompted me to increase the text size slightly in certain sections of the infographic. Her suggestion to change the background to a more textured pattern strongly disagreed with my color model so unfortunately I did not carry out this bit of advice.
Critique #3: Robert Brooks
Robert preferred version 2 to version one as well because of the visual hierarchy created in this display. He thinks there should be a bigger title in the middle above the map. He agreed that I should draw from my visual language model more for the titles and make them consistent throughout the display.
Model emulation feedback
He thought that I emulated my color model well but that I could emulate my visual language model more. Overall though Robert thought that I did a very good job emulating my layout and typography models.
Revisions based on this critique
Robert's critique were similar to Andrew's, but the main aspect of Robert's critique was to draw upon the visual hierarchy more overall. This prompted me to change the transparency of my relationship display in order to coincide with my color model more appropriately, as well as create more visual hierarchy.